Showing posts with label Works in Progress. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Works in Progress. Show all posts

Wednesday, December 19, 2007

Fiddler and Her Proofs

I should be all aglow with happiness--the final version of Like a Thief in the Night is turned in, and the excerpt is up on the Samhain site. Instead, all I see are things I want to change.

I can't help it, I'm a fiddler. I nitpick. I tweak.

Editor Laurie and the ever-patient Bam can attest, every time I send in a draft, something is different. I just can't help it. Just yesterday, I noticed in Ember chapter 8 that I described fabric as jacquard when I really meant brocade. O, the horror! I can't believe I did that! (Sorry, Anonymous Auction Winner!). It will be fixed in the full PDF.

I can't leave well enough alone. I change a word here, a sentence there. When a question about my main character that wakes me in the middle of the night like, "What does she do when she's not killing people?" I have to answer it.

It's like some kind of curse: Lo, and she shall edit nigh until the very end.

One of these days, I'm going to have to learn to let go. Maybe I can do that by obsessing on my next WIP?

WIP Title: Rohais
Word Count: 7,000/95,000
Current Favorite Words:
Alone of all my sisters, I was not named to honor queens or saints. Instead, my stepmother named me for the climbing rose on the south wall of her garden, with its sweet scent and wicked thorns.

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Wednesday, October 17, 2007

Happy Dance

I finally finished the WIP I've been working on for the past 3.5 weeks. Instead of running 12,000-15,000 words, Ember came in at over 31,000. That's a big baby.

Ember
Charm is a curse. Love is a fire. And this story? It's is no fairytale.

Zokutou word meterZokutou word meter
31,304 / 15,000
(208.7%)
Time to take it off the old WIP board.

I spent more time on it than I'd planned, but I don't regret it. Ember was sitting on my hard drive at 1,500 words for at least a year. I just could not motivate myself to write it for sale. But once I started writing for fun and web content, the story just took off.

Perhaps the reason for my hesitation was that I have a longer story set in the same world that I like better. The other story, Rohais is also first person narrated. I was beginning to think the narrative voices of the two main characters were a bit too similar. The funny thing is, now that the story is finished, I don't think Ember sounds too much like Rohais.

So, what have I learned.
  1. Writing is fun.
  2. I do not need the motivation of a deadline to finish a story (but it helps).
  3. I shouldn't talk myself out of stories I haven't written yet. Maybe the things I'm worried about won't be a problem.
  4. Some stories run longer than you think they will, and that's OK.
Look for Ember in November.

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Excerpt: Ember

If you were wondering which fairytale I ripped off and ripped up to write Ember, this excerpt should answer your question.
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I was not surprised when, scarcely nine months after my mother’s death, my father returned from one of his buying trips with a cartload of second-rate silks and a new wife. I wasn’t angry, either. He was the sort of man who needed a wife. He needed stability, love and care. He needed someone to remind him to eat in the mornings and to take him to bed at night.

When I saw the carriage trailing his cart, I’d high hopes of his new wife. But then he told me she was a beautiful, impoverished noblewoman. He called her a delicate flower who needed his care. He told me his new wife had two daughters just my age, and he promised we would be the best of friends.

My father herded half a dozen footmen out to hold the horses, set up the stairs and open the door so he could help his new wife down from the carriage. Her hand preceded her from the dark interior. It was delicate and powdered white, gilded with a filigree of rings and bracelets. Her fingernails were varnished pink. The stones in her many rings twinkled prettily in the sunlight, but I knew they were glass.

My stepmother’s foot followed next. She wore shoes of gaudy pink satin, frayed at the toes, studded with dull glass gems, and capped by a spindly wooden heel that would barely support its wearer from one end of her bedchamber to the other. I do not mean to be cruel when I say this, only factual: I knew her for a whore before I ever saw her face.

...She paused when she saw me, and I couldn’t blame her. I knew what I looked like—my cold expression, my red hair and freckled skin, my black eyes smoldering like hot coals. Her eyes flicked to the torches flanking our door, noting, I am sure, the way the flames yearned toward me though the wind urged them in the opposite direction.

Her face tightened beneath its façade of paint. Her white-powdered hand wavered on the verge of greeting me. In that moment, she realized my father’s tales of an innocent, biddable daughter were spun from the same wishful imagination that had let him believe her to be a noblewoman, and to believe the two hard-eyed whores (scarcely a decade her junior) who peered out of the carriage behind her were her daughters.

“Step-mamá!” I greeted her, taking her shoulders and kissing her powdered cheeks. My lips came away white with a mixture of lead and lard, but it was worth it for the expression of surprise that crossed her face. When my father wasn’t looking, I wiped my mouth on the cuff of my velvet sleeve.

“Come inside, let me show you and my new sisters our home. I know we shall be ever so happy together!”

With my father’s help, the three women wrestled their threadbare satin skirts and listing panniers up the stairs and into the house. I showed them to the parlor, which still stank faintly of burned flesh, and directed my new step mama to sit in my mother’s blue leather chair.

“I just knew you four would get along,” my father said, beaming from the doorway. I hadn’t seen him so happy since before my mother’s illness. “I’ll leave you ladies to get acquainted while I see to the unloading of my latest shipment of fine textiles.”

My new stepmother’s lips parted on a word as the door swung shut. I think she was going to say, “Wait.”

I smiled, pleased as a spider to have so many flies trapped in my parlor. I winked at the hearth and it roared to life, shooting flames up the chimney and sparks onto the rug. The candles followed, lighting all at once.

“Please don’t hurt us!” One of my new stepsisters pleaded. Despite her shopworn satin and powdered hair, she suddenly looked young and frightened.

“We didn’t know,” said the other. “We didn’t know Master Drayman’s daughter was a Wise Woman.”

“A witch,” I corrected, smiling wide to show my teeth.


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Sunday, October 7, 2007

Wrap It Up

Updating my WIP list, both here (right) and on my website, I noticed something: I have 9 viable stories on the ol' hard drive, of which I have finished exactly 2 --two! dos! deux! ni!. I've had good luck with both of my finished stories. Like a Thief in the Night will be released by Samhain in January, 2008. And the editor who rejected Bright said she liked it, but thought it would work better as a longer story (a sentiment with which I totally agree. Keeping that story to novella-length was a bitch and a half. I like it better as a short novel.)

But, really. Just two finished stories? Out of over 200,000 words? That is some lousy track record. The problem with being a seat-of-the-pants writer is that the writing is only fun when I don't know what's going to happen. Three of the remaining seven other stories on my hard drive are in, or very close to, their final chapters. And that's when it gets tough. Writing to find out what happens next, that takes no discipline. But writing when you know what's going to happen. That starts feeling like work. ::sigh::

But, I do suppose that if I ever want to realize my childhood dream of becoming the biracial, American Barbara Cartland, I'm gonna have to pull up my socks and get down to work.

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Saturday, August 4, 2007

A Man, A Plan, A Canal -- Panama!

This has nothing to do with Panama. I just like palindromes.
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About 11 months ago, I wrote a post about a story that was almost finished. It was the Original "The Bitter End". That story, the "Untitled Sci-fi" is very close to finished. But I still haven't finished it. It's one of the stories that I mapped out and outlined before I got in touch with my inner seat-of-the-panster. Maybe that's why I'm having no luck finishing it--there's no suspense left in the writing.

In the time since I wrote that post, I've written two short stories, and started on a full-length novel about which I am very excited. But my "Untitled Sci-fi" nags at me. So here's my goal: I will finish that story by August 28, 2007 -- a year to the day that I first complained about it.

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Saturday, July 28, 2007

The Bitter End Again and Again

I've been here before. I'd hoped it wouldn't be like this. I'd hoped that this would get better with practice. I'm five thousand words from the end of the short story I'm trying to finish, and putting words on the page is like pulling teeth--my own.

But I'm going to do it. I will.

Take a deep breath.

Get a grip on those pliers girl.

Breathe.

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Sunday, July 8, 2007

70 Days of Sweat

I just read about Allison Kent's 70 Days of Sweat challenge, so, of course, I had to go over and sign up. The challenge is to write your novel in 70 days, which, unlike NaNoWriMo, is a doable challenge for folks who are staring down the barrel of a 100,000 word novel.

I'm not working on a new full length right now. Currently, I'm trying to finish a novella (Bright) and a short novel (Split) and the as-yet untitled Sci-fi thingy. Overall, I need to write about 50K words, and edit and polish. So I'm doing a modified version of the challenge. It's rather like doing a modified push up--same name, way less difficult.

Point is, I'm gunning to write 1500 to 2000 words a day for the next 70 (okay, 75) days and have 3 finished stories by September 20th, 2007. Participants are supposed to report updates every Wednesday and Sunday.

Here are the stories I'm working on. I'll create word count charts for them, soon:


1) Title: Bright
2) Hero/Profession: Kostantin Amur / Man of Mystery or Criminal?
3) Heroine/Profession: Rosalind Stark / Waitress and non-starving artist
4) Setting: Dark River City
5) Length: 25K-30K words
6) Current Status
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5,000 / 27,000
(18.5%)

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1) Title: Split
2) Hero/Occupation: Jake Wright/Jack Sinistral / Scientist/Assassin/Split personality
3) Heroine/Occupation: Mara Keane / Professional Knife-thrower
4) Setting: Dark River City
5) Length: 45K-60K words
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1) Book Title: Untitled
2) Hero/Occupation: Undecided/Alien liaison
3) Heroine/Occupation: Ysabel Ravi/Translator & Traitor
4) Lost planet
5) 45k-60k words

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Tuesday, June 19, 2007

That's My Line

Coolness. My entry made it to round three of the Samhain First line contest.

Rosalind’s butter-yellow silk gown made her stand out from the crowd of black-clad sophisticates like a baby chick amid a murder of hungry crows. Lost in a shifting sea of beautiful faces, she looked for her escort, but saw only tanned skin, white teeth, and greedy gazes that tracked her path through the ballroom the way ordinary party guests would have tracked the waiter with the best tray of hors d’oeuvre.

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First-Person Fatigue

Is it just me, or are there a few too many snarky-heroined open-ended first-person paranormal series out there? I can't buy books because I am broke, so I picked up Karen Marie Morning's latest fairy-flavored offering from the New Books shelf at the local biblioteca. She's not my usual style - a few too many virgin heroines - but borrowers can't be choosers.

Darkfever was fast and readable, but rather stale. Perhaps I've seen this sort of young, snarky, fashion-obsessed first-person narrator before? Lately when I pick up a first-person narrated paranormal I get the same queasy feeling I get when I've eaten too many beignets. The difference between "enough" and "one too many" is always one - and you never know which one until it hits you. Mmm. Hungry. Who wants beignets?

Maybe I should give up on the first-person dark fantasy story that's been sitting on my hard drive for the past two years...

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Wednesday, June 13, 2007

Word(s) Count

I've been thinking about contests lately. I've never considered my competitive side to be a flaw, but it does twist me in knots. I've nothing but admiration for people who beat me fairly. When I lose at something, I don't throw fits, I ruminate and review and figure out where I went wrong before attacking the thing all over again. Despite the way competition cramps my gut, it ultimately leads to improvement.

Bam has that first of the month 200 word contest. I think I've come in 2nd twice, but I can't regret* it as I have started two enjoyable stories from the 200 word entries I wrote. I also entered the Samhain 1st line contest, and so far I've made it to the second round.

Both the 200 word contests and the first line contest have forced me to focus on how every word counts - how to put the most action and punch into two hundred words, how to create the best possible hook with the first five lines. With previous stories, I've been so daunted by my word count goal that I often wrote more than was necessary, and ended up bored by my own story midway through. Since I've been focusing on making my words and sentences count, I haven't had any problem reaching my length goals. Who knew all those "quality over quantity" people would be so right?




*Okay, I do admit I was a little perturbed over the last contest when I had an early lead and later got clobbered by like 40 votes for the winning entry. I was feeling pretty lousy until I moseyed over to the winner's blog and discovered: a) I'd been clobbered by a published writer; b) she'd posted a couple of different entries in her blog asking her readers - of which she had significantly more than 2 - to check out the contest and vote. I can't feel too bad about losing under those circumstances - or, rather, I shouldn't feel too bad because sometimes we find ourselves in situations where we simply can't (and shouldn't) hope to compete. That doesn't mean I'll stop trying, it just means I'll try to skip the usual round of review and recrimination for a nice hot bath and a good book.

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Friday, June 1, 2007

Bittersweet

Like a Thief in the Night
Zokutou word meter
26,167 / 25,000
(104.7%)


I did it. I finished "Like a Thief in the Night" and sent it off to Samhain yesterday - at the bitter end of the deadline for their Strangers in the Night Valentine 2008 anthology. I thought I would feel more relieved to finally be done, but that just ain't so.


Last night I printed out the story again and found a few typos I'd missed. (Why do I torture myself like this?) Also, though I'm pleased with the ending, I would have loved just 2500 more words over the length of the novella. It's funny to complain about length-restrictions in a piece I started as a 200 word contest entry, but there you have it.

Overall, I'm pretty pleased with myself. I managed to take a story from 200 words to completion in about three and a half weeks. And given the number of half-finished works in progress I have sitting around, that's quite an achievement.

Even if "Like a Thief in the Night" doesn't get picked, I'll still be glad of the experience of writing it. I worked hard on the story and finished it - and I had a good time doing it. And besides, I happen to think it's a pretty fun story.

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Friday, May 25, 2007

The Bitter End

Haven't I written this post before? At the start of the month, I wrote a 200 word entry for Bam's monthly contest. Didn't win, but I was curious to see where it would go so I kept on writing. Then I surfed over to Samhain and saw the call for submissions to their 2008 "Strangers in the Night" anthology. Short story (25K words), due by June 1, 2007.

"OK," I thought, "the story I'm writing has strangers who meet in the night. Granted, the heroine kills the hero by the third paragraph, but I've got 25,000 words to help those two crazy kids work things out. I've already set myself a goal to write 2, 000 words a day. This is doable, right?"

Maybe...

I'm sitting here looking at the last 5K words of the story. I know what's going to happen. I know how things will end. And I can't get it written. What is my problem?

And in case you're wondering, that other story, the one I posted about waaaaaaay back in the day? It's quite a bit longer than my current WIP, but it languishes on my hard drive, 5k words from completion. Uggh!

Like a Thief in the Night

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20,000 / 25,000
(80.0%)


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Sunday, September 17, 2006

Split

I spend a lot of time talking about what I don't like in a Romance novel. I make fun of dumb heroines, overly macho heroes, and every other aspect of the genre - but only out of love. The sad truth of the matter is that I, like so many other Romance readers, aspire to become a published author.

Despite all my complaining, it remains to be seen whether I can avoid the pitfalls I rail against in published novels. And who am I to point fingers, anyway? It's not as though people actually pay to read my writing. In the spirit of fairness, I submit an excerpt from one of my current WIPs.

Title: Split
Genre: Paranormal/Sci-Fi/Pop-Culture Pastiche Erotic Romance
Length: 65,000
Condition: Unfinished

Mara Keane was arrested for murder, but that’s nothing new. She’s a woman with a past, and the crooked cops in Dark River City won’t ever let her forget it. What is new is the shadow that tracks her path as she leaves the police station, a vigilante assassin called the Left Hand of Death who’s come to town to take out the city’s biggest crime boss.

Jack Sinistral may not know Dark River, but he has Mara’s number. Danger and desire go hand in hand for the smart-mouthed professional knife-thrower, and Sinistral is the sort of man who can mete out pain and pleasure in deliciously equal measures. But he has competition.

Though Sinistral has staked his claim on her body, Mara’s heart belongs to hunky Dr. Jake Wright. Jake is everything she ever wanted in a man, and if Mara could resist the dark temptation of Sinistral’s touch she would happily spend the rest of her life in Jake’s strong embrace.

But Dark River isn’t like anyplace else. Here, passions run as deep and deadly as the river that divides the city. Here, nothing is simple, everyone has secrets, and no one is what they seem – including the good doctor Wright. Soon the cops are closing in on Sinistral, the crime boss wants Mara’s head on a plate, and Jake begins to suspect that he’s something less than sane. In order to survive, the killer must meet his conscience, the doctor must face his dark side, and Mara must discover whether love is enough to unite two sundered souls in a city where everything else is split.
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